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Here be where we talk about Part 1 of 2084 overall.

Part 1 contains chapters 1 through 7.

Feel free to break it down into individual chapter posts if you wish.

I have to say, the very first page made me  a bit nervous, but I thought the classrom set-up was neat.

I thought it sounded very much like something 'we' would do. Just recreate everything virtually rather than write and create stuff by hand. 

Alright, enjoying it so far. It's a pretty basic setup, but a tried and true one. Overpowering establishment villain, clueless protagonist hopelessly outclassed and fleeing. Very Hunger Games.

There are enough cliches in the writing to annoy me slightly, but not enough to make me stop enjoying the adventure. There were a couple of points, though, that really made me wince. 'I don't know why I know we can trust _____, but I know we can.' That really bugged me, because to my thinking it's lazy-ass writing, dodges out of what could be a nice knot of tension in the story, and replaces it with a feeling that the plot is supposed to move forward to the next step in the outline but the author couldn't think of a cooler way to do it.

Posted by: S.A. Barton

Alright, enjoying it so far. It's a pretty basic setup, but a tried and true one. Overpowering establishment villain, clueless protagonist hopelessly outclassed and fleeing. Very Hunger Games.

There are enough cliches in the writing to annoy me slightly, but not enough to make me stop enjoying the adventure. There were a couple of points, though, that really made me wince. 'I don't know why I know we can trust _____, but I know we can.' That really bugged me, because to my thinking it's lazy-ass writing, dodges out of what could be a nice knot of tension in the story, and replaces it with a feeling that the plot is supposed to move forward to the next step in the outline but the author couldn't think of a cooler way to do it.

I'm curious how closely the book is going to mirror 1984. I'm not *enamored* of the writing thus far, but it's not the most horrible stuff I've read either. Hoping it picks up as it goes on. The girl's dad could be interesting.